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In the lecture , the professor is skeptical about the idea of the reading passage that three solutions are mentioned to save the Torreya. The professor argues that the solutions proposed in the reading passage are unconvincing.
In the reading passage , one solution is scientists should establish the microclimate suitable for the Torreya’s growth. On the contrary , the professor mentions that helping the Torreya reestablish in its original habitat is unlikely to success. The professor claims that the coolest and dampest areas of the microclimate is strongly influenced by the many worldwide climate effects such as the global-warming.
The professor then opposes the reading passage’s solutions that relocating Torreya is unrealistic. The professor states an example about the Black Locus which is a specie thrives quickly after entering the new habitat and endangers many scarce species.
Finally , the professor disproves the reading passage’s solution that scientist should bring Torreya to the laboratory for protecting and improving the survival rate of it. The professor points that trees preserved in the research center cannot resist diseases in the long period. The professor again opposes the last solution which is mentioned in the reading passage
以上是一位同学学习完综合写作方法课课所写的文章,以下再给同学们关于这篇写作的一个范文,同学们可以将自己写的每一段和范文的每一段对比一下,看的过程中并不是要将自己的文章改成和范文一模一样,但能看到自己的写作私思路是不是有问题:
In the lecture, the professor is skeptical about the three ways to prevent the decline of Torreya in the reading. The professor argues that none of the solutions is satisfactory.
In the reading passage, Torreya can be reestablished in the cool and wet microclimate in the
same location. On the contrary, the professor says that the microclimate has been affected by the climate change of the large region. Global warming lead to the increase of temperature in this region and wetlands throughout Florida have been drained. Therefore, the areas are becoming drier and are no longer suitable for Torreya to survive.
The professor then opposes the reading‘s idea of moving Torreya to the further North area. The professor states that when another tree was moved to a new environment, it spread quickly and killed many endangered plants and trees. Therefore, assisted migration may have unpredicted outcomes for the new environment.
Finally, the professor disproves the reading‘s idea that Torreya can be preserved in research
centers. The professor points out that when kept in the research center, Torreya trees cannot resist diseases. In order to survive diseases, the population of Torreya trees should be large and genetically diverse, which cannot be achieved in research centers.
第一段:阅读中的观点明确表达出来,但注意听力中的用词,在这里给大家强调的一点是:在写作的过程中,可以运用听力中的原词,所以将第一段中的unconvicing词的使用不是很准确。
第二段:听力中反驳阅读对应观点的细节信息需要补充,会使得内容更充实,具体可以写出word climate造成的cool and wet microclimate的结果,需要注意自己在听听力时所记的细节信息Global warming lead to the increase of temperature in this region and wetlands throughout Florida have been drained.
第三段:模板的使用错误,这块的观点是阅读中的观点,而不是听力的反驳观点,且注意阅读中的观点是:move T to the further North area,而学生所写的阅读和听力的观点完全对应不上,没有达到官方评分标准的connecting.
第四段:The professor again opposes the last solution which is mentioned in the reading passage这句话很多余,注意文章内容和表达的 redundancy。
总结:范文的使用作用:
1. 发现自己的写作思路问题,表达的句子和句子之间是否达到了评分标准中的连贯性;
2. 是否有听到听力中的关键信息和细节信息,可能自己忽略了听力中的相关信息;
3. 验证自己所学习的写作方法的运用是否到位;
4. 学习和总结句式的表达和词汇的积累及运用。
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